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Tuesday, May 15, 2012 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Captain
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Just wanted to state, I just started reading about the Morfs, and I think your stories rate up their. Many years ago, I use to give book reviews, [Explorations], you do have real talent. I enjoyed the story line and I hope you continue with your expressions in the written word.
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Tuesday, May 15, 2012 from uEWAyndRInFFGTCvr, UJwgAUlIxHNSKY
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Anisha
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Hi Celia – thanks for getting in touch and apologies for having dispensed no further pearls of wisdom…. It’s been a really busy month and time management, never a particularly strong point, has been hopeless. New post shortly.
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Saturday, May 12, 2012 from sbTzxtQpRBBRUXMWHE, BtjSZkuoS
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Chyna
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I’m not clear on what’s happening, is the adsense appearing on the post/page or the sidebar? Is it caused by a plugin? If it’s on the post page, check the page/post to make sure no adsense is there and then look into either a home.php or into the index.php for adsense.
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Monday, April 30, 2012 from YYyRFvRmpdeSEffF, iYHUcMOhhl
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Sukey
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Edit the post, then go to the” HTML” view of the post instead of the “Visual,” then where you want the post to end, click on “More,” and a tag showing up as “” should appear next to where you want the post to end. A link at the bottom of the post should appear saying, “Read the rest of this entry…” after you post your post.
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Saturday, April 28, 2012 from gSGMycdMV, HBJnjZKfjtiHdmIzh
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Cindy
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Monday, November 15, 2010 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Sadarsa
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I agree with the previous poster, though im an American and don't really know too much about England. I would say that in a world where a very large percent of the population posses powers capable of so much destruction, that it is only common sense that the police would be forced to carry firearms.
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Friday, July 11, 2008 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Jonas M
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Since comments are wanted I will write some. I'm probably more of a critic than a writer anyway.

This story was excellent. I can't think of anything that would need to be changed to make it better. At least for Americans[like me] who don't know too much about Britain. Reading the other comments here gave me a little more insight into the societal differences that I glanced over without much thought when initially reading it. I don't think that the police carrying guns is out of place at all. This is a changed world from what we live in with many dangerous people who have powers. It makes sense that the police, or constables if you prefer, would carry weapons on a regular basis.

As for the different terminology i.e. police officer vs constable it doesn't hurt it at all for an American reading the story. If your target audience is British then by all means work on that aspect to keep it consistent with the area. It didn't bother me at all though.

So great work and keep it up.
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Saturday, September 22, 2007 from In the Thames Valley, England
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EMW
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Well that's interesting, I don't know enough about England and Englishness despite being English and living in England. Well that's a surprise to me at any rate

Yes I am English and I live in Oxfordshire so the story setting and people is from the world around me using the old adage write what you know since I was sure if I tried to write a story set in the states I would get it all wrong and annoy the locals. Seems I've managed to do that anyway.

The gun thing, yes I would agree with you that police are not and shouldn't be armed. In this case it is probably more a bit of bad writing or lack of detail. I was thinking of it as a policeman in a small rural community is guarding a place where they are planning to burn a girl alive. He takes one of the farmers guns just in case things get nasty since he is already an accomplice to kidnapping and murder.

As for calling policemen Officer, well that's just what have always done not wanting to offend them by incorrectly calling them the wrong title.

I'm guilty of a certain amount of creative licence and exaggeration for story purposes but I've certainly encounters religious nutters of all sorts and small villages can often seem to focus that sort of attitude and the not in my back yard thing. They can have some strange often dispalletable attitudes not inline with the rest of society like for instance fox hunting where a bunch of country tofs chase a fox on horse back with a pack of dogs that eventually tear it to pieces, pretty barbaric even the chase it corner it with dogs and then shoot it is still a pretty awful way to die. Population control of a pest is one thing but that's pretty cruel and inefficient way of doing it. But their interest groups would say that is the country way, the way it has always been done and city folk don't understand it and the foxes love being ripped to shreds alive by a pack of vicious dogs.

I would agree that usually this sort of thing seems to be less extreme in the UK than US but this is fairly early on in the timeline so worse than it might be by the time some of the other stories come around plus small pockets can concentrate those sorts of attitude at least in my experience.

I would agree my villains are quite two dimensional it's something I hope I'm improving at

Perhaps some of it is Americanisms creeping into my writing I do a fair amount of work with Americans and often have to translate things so they will understand perhaps that is slipping into my stories as well I will have to watch for that in future. It could also be partly my own quirky upbringing and local differences.

Thanks for the advice and kind words feedback is always useful
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Friday, September 21, 2007 from Edinburgh, Scotland (UK)
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Great Sage
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I am confused - is this story meant to be set in Oxfordshire , England? because if it is then you have shown a feeble grasp of how English people speak, act and how our Police conduct themselves - ALL of the bad guys speak like redneck hillbilly cliches, all the Police men are referred to as Officer - a term no UK citizen ever uses, 'Officer' Stevens reaches for a gun - no, sorry our village Bobbies are never armed, only special units are armed and only on specific missions. The term Constable, or P.C. is used as a title for Police in this country. Throwing in words like 'Mum and Loo and Cuppa is very clever but when you screw up over the depiction of Police men then you reveal your origins and your lack of thorough research.
The bad guys were the worst kind of cliche - barely one dimensional and totally inappropriate for the setting - Religious extremism is less common over here - i am prepared to let that slide as this is set in the future and odd circumstances prevail, none the less I am totally fed up with this kind of bad guy - seriously , why do you all write the exact same ignorant thug bigots as baddies? Why not a criminal that does things for profit or just plain badness - anything but more of this Oh So very X men nonsense. I got bored of it twelve years ago in the X titles and I am no less bored of it now - this goes to all the writers - Create better bad guys!!!

Now onto the good - I like the protagonist and her friends - they are cool and I like the characterisation of them too - I thought the story had a nice pace and was engaging, really all you have to do is actually learn how people speak in the Thames Valley and sort out your cluelessness over how our Police operate and are referred to and you are on a winner - more interesting antagonists too would really help.
Sorry to be negative but seeing as how no one from the UK seems to have called you out on your mistakes I thought you would appreciate some advice from a subject of HM Queen Elizabeth II, hope I wasn't too rough on you
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Monday, May 28, 2007 from [not submitted], USA
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Flashdance
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I agree. Add more! The story most definitely isn't complete!
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