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Monday, August 22, 2011 from Leslie, USA
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Zaffen
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It has been a little over a year since this was submitted. It is a good read and I would enjoy reading it if it were finished.

Be well;
Zaffen
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Friday, August 06, 2010 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Mad Hobbit
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good start,as for how he happened to be found, we do not know the powers involved,maybe a link to others , who know,only the author,i can still see the parents causing some problems, a he said she said,until a telepath steps in
like i said would like to read a lot more of this
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Sunday, September 30, 2007 from Edinburgh, Scotland (UK)
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Great Sage
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Anyone that has read the web comic Discordia knows who Eris is, I only hope that you add more instalments to this a good deal more frequently than the person that does that comic, although at the moment we are looking at a six and a half month gap - this does not fil me with confidence - and that is a shame becasue we have an interesting character and an unusually Dark tale with who knows what cool stuff coming up.

Eris seems to be relatively unfazed by her gender swap and more disturbed by her unique appearance, still I am sure that Professor X...oh sorry Sierra Marren will aid her and the rest of the X men.. darn it , Morfs survivors through the days to come - but if I see any hint of telepathic super computers or a Danger room I am setting Stan Lee on you, you naughty person .
Try to continue this soon, thanks.
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Monday, April 09, 2007 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Jakaris
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Very nice, I'm looking forward to more, soon
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Tuesday, March 27, 2007 from Midwest, USA
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KR
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Similar to Eris, things went very fast for me, so I can only offer limited comment right now. I am forced to believe that her parents are at best losers who hate work, anything resembling change, MORFS, and may well hate themselves without realizing it.
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Monday, March 26, 2007 from Tustin, MI, USA
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Ray Drouillard
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I have seen people as bad as Eris's parents. The hardest thing to believe is that Eris came out as good as she did. Most neglected/unloved children become harsh and unlovable themselves. If you see one come out OK, it's because they were loved by someone else -- a relative, neighbor, friend, or whatever.
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Monday, March 26, 2007 from Bellevue, USA
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Terry
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Thanks for the story. I think it's very good. It seemed a bit rushed at the beginning but it read well. That's important.


Eris's parents were a bit hard to believe. I just can't imagine real people acting like that. There was one good thing about them - they made the turnaround that much nicer. Sierra is as good as the parents are bad. It was very satisfying for me.

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Tuesday, March 20, 2007 from Tustin, MI, USA
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Ray Drouillard
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I have to admit that I started reading with some trepidation because I expected a much darker story. As it is, I really enjoy seeing Eris become accustomed to being treated like a human being.

Keep up the good work!

I have to agree with the other posters that the first part was kind of rushed. I also agree with your reasons -- why hang around and mope in the mud?

Now, it's time for some descriptive language, introspection, dialogues that highlight people's personalities, and interesting [and amusing] little side trips.
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Tuesday, March 20, 2007 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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joanne206
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I would like to read how the story progress.good start.
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Tuesday, March 20, 2007 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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sh
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A very promising start! I do agree with an earlier comment about it feeling a tad rushed, and you might consider rewriting the first chapter at some later date, when you're comfortable with the story and character.

I did have a minor issue with the apparent deus ex machina involved in her happening to be found by, lo and behold, people who run a school for male->female morfs. It seemed just too convenient.

Another minor issue has more to do with the whole Morfs world: in such a world, where stray DNA ends up in your genome due to morfs, wouldn't minors be absolutely forbidden to work in a zoo? :-]

I look forward with anticipation to further chapters -- thank you!

Sh.
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