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zondag 13 juli 2008 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Jonas M
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This was a very good story. I like that it merges into Jet and Quartz as it expands the story line providing all those little details that makes a story more interesting. I don't mind dark at all. I prefer it, quite frankly, because it makes stories seem more real. There can be an infinite number of stories that don't even touch on much of the bad stuff in the world and the darker side of human nature but what is good in them doesn't shine nearly as much as a dark story with a glimmer of hope at the end. The glimmer in a dark story is brighter than all the care free stories combined. Keep up the good work.
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dinsdag 6 maart 2007 from New York, USA
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Darian Deamos
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June,

It's done. I'm not coming back to this story. That isnt to say that the larger story of what happenes to Wolf, his family, and such is over. Far from it. But this story is designed to run directly int the next several chapters of Jet and Quartz, and all the issues left over from this get wrapped up there.

Probably not helpful, but that's the plan.
Thought I'd make it very plain.
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woensdag 28 februari 2007 from [not submitted], usa
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early june
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The story was good. When will we see the next chapter? You do realize this is an incomplete story, don't you? I like the Morf's series. I like jet and quartz. I liked what you have posted on this story. I did not like the suspense, the incompletness, the halting of the story-telling in mid stride. Had I known, I would have done as I try to do with serial stories; that is, collect them till they are completed and read them as an entirety.
I will look for the subsequent chapters and do exactly that.
I did enjoy what you offered. Thank you for posting it.
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maandag 5 februari 2007 from New York, USA
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Darian Deamos
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Terry,

It's cool. I get that it's really disturbing. I know that. But it was something that had to be written for things in Jet and Quartz to make sense later. There's a comments thread in the forums with more on this discusison, and you can go and post there. Novel's are welcome.
I'm considering adding an authors note to this with some additional information, primarily due to the feedback I've gotten here. I look at all critisisims and praise equaly, and while I disagree with your opinion, I respect your views and am pleased that you care enough to share them.
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zondag 4 februari 2007 from Bellevue, USA
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Terry
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This is my last post on this story. I promise.


I am such a hypocrite sometimes. I completely understand about having to write a dark story. I've written a few dark stories myself. I had to write them to purge them from my mind. Until I write one down, it festers in my mind, haunting and torturing me.


I guess I really was a bit too traumatized by this story. It took me by surprise because I wasn't expecting it to be so dark. I expected it to be more along the lines of Quartz and Jet.


After sleeping on it, I had to post this. I'm sorry for trying to squelch your writing. It's very important to get it all out.

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zondag 4 februari 2007 from Bellevue, USA
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Terry
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Oops. I think the author and I were posting at the same time. He addressed some of the things I wrote but his post appears before mine, making me look like I didn't read his post. I didn't read it because it wasn't there yet!


After reading his post, I agree that the vivisecting was important to add. It did explain how they could add Wolf's controlling device. I still say that the sheer volume of violent scenes was not necessary.


It appears that all of the inhumane treatment was added to show how Wolf was turned into a monster but I never got the impression that he was a monster. He sounded quite sane. He tried to subdue instead of kill his opponents. When that didn't work out, he killed them quickly to keep them from being tortured. He showed restraint and compassion. He only does what he's told because of the controlling device in his head.


The only monstrous thing he wants to do in my opinion is kill his tormentors. I have to confess that after reading the story, I'd like to kill his tormentors too. Perhaps that makes me a monster. So be it. If that's the case, then I'll wager that a good portion of the human race are monsters. Maybe that's what you're trying to say in your story. That's not an easy thing for some people to accept. They wouldn't like to think of themselves as monsters [under certain extreme conditions at least].


One last question: If Wolf is such a monster, why doesn't he rip the wires from his skull in a blind rage?


Oh foo. This is turning into a book. It should probably be discussed in the forum. Someday I'll register.

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zondag 4 februari 2007 from Bellevue, USA
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Terry
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Wow. The comments are as emotional as the story. I have to say that this story was very difficult for me to finish. I was very upset and angry about the way Wolf was treated. It did seem a bit extreme to me. I don't think you needed to add all of the graphic details to paint the bad guys as bad. Leaving something to the imagination might have been better for some scenes in this story.


Besides being well-written, the only redeeming quality of this story that I can think of is that it made me want to see what finally happens to Wolf. I'd like some closure. I'll have to read Quartz and Jet again to make sure I didn't forget anything. I recognized Wolf as the hunter of the twins but I don't remember what happened - if anything. I think I'm too traumatized by this story. *shudder*

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zondag 4 februari 2007 from New York, USA
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Darian Deamos
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Leia, what I think happened here is a bit of a miscomunication.

When I read your initial review, it seemed to me as if you were telling me that I was using the more disturbing and graphic parts of the story as a crutch, and that you viewed that as a weakness and crutch in my writing. I was offended primarily because it was almost the opposite.
Every scene it Wolf is deliberate and neccesary. Every piece of information and action taken both by and against Wolf was considered and analyzed not on the basis of what would excite or engage the reader, but on what needed to occur.

Wolf is NOT a perfectly sane individual. He has been tortured and controled nearly to the breaking point. His vivisection in particular was nessecary for two reasons, it demonstrated the real extent of his regenerative capabilities and it made the lenghts and inhumanity of his captors immediate and obvious.
The only other 'gore' actualy shown, rather then referenced, was the corpse of the one woman he knocked out, and the men he killed trying to escape. Both were nessicary, and in all cases, I cut the scenes as short as possible. In the first, I was again introducing the concept of the inevitabel results of a stay in this program, and in the second the fundimental change in Wolf's character that marked him as transforming from Jack into Wolf.
Wolf is a killer, with no compunction or compassion. If he fights, he kills, and he sleeps soundly over it. Death holds no emotion for him, pain holds no particular importance to him. He nither enjoys nor fears either, simply does what he needs to do.
The entiere point of the story was how a good, briliant and fundamentaly innocent boy turns into a monster.
And he is a monster.
He just happens to be on the good guys side, is all.
Think about this, without that vivisection, how would the director have discovered that Wolf's head could be cut open, and then heal shut again without even a scar? The results of that inhuman, unspeakable act by the director was the key to one of the bigest parts of Wolf's history. How he got that collar, and what it does.

You dont like it. Ok, I can live with that. You thought that the violence was unnessecary. I say that it was, and that furthermore, things in this story are going to walk up and smack Jet, Quartz, and everyone else, right in the face. This is not an isolated story. Think of it as J&Q 4.5
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donderdag 1 februari 2007 from [not submitted], United States
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LeiaMarie
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Let’s see. I give you what I thought was a nice comment on your writing in Jet and Quartz and then leave one saying basically I do not like Wolf’s Tail so far and I am attacking your ability personally? Your ‘happy bunnies’ statement was insulting. Get real. If you want all your readers to only sing praises to your ego in the comments, well I am sorry that I did not feel I could in this tale.

In saying ‘resort’ I mean gore, guts, inhuman treatment, gruesome violence beyond necessity, vivisection while awake, etc well beyond what a well written story, such as Jet and Quartz, needs to make a story line work. It is like comparing the movies Da Vinci Code with it’s self flagellation to the Texas Chainsaw Massacre. You do not have to ‘resort’ to descriptive and extreme amounts of gore et Al. to make a story good. I felt that in Jet and Quartz you showed that 1] you could write well 2] you had a good imagination in your story line and 3] the story was entertaining. You ‘resorted’ to a ‘demented’ imagination that demeaned your story in Wolf’s Tale, it is in my impression only. In is in no way that I do not ‘like this kind of tale’. I do. It is the extreme unnecessary descriptive details of your tale that I objected too.

Nihilisim is defined as a philosophical position which argues that the world, and especially human existence, is without objective meaning, purpose, comprehensible truth, or essential value. Nihilists generally believe all of the following: God does not exist, traditional morality is false, etc.

I guess one could equate dark nihilisim to Drizzt Do'Urden the main character in R.A. Salvatore's legendary Fantasy Series for The Forgotten Realms. I sure do not see the symbolism here to or in your Wolf’s Tail.

Finally please notice that I did not say you did not write what you did well, you basically did. Nor did I say the story line was not well thought out, it was. Nor did I say that your tie in to Jet and Quartz this way was lacking, it was well done. I do look forward to your next install on Jet and Quartz. I said “I did not like it!!!” meaning just that for, me, one reader, me only, did not like the way this tale was presented.

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woensdag 31 januari 2007 from Makawao, HI, [not submitted]
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Robert Zriss
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I think it is almost as hard to read as you said it was to write. It was disturbing and sad, but I think I see where this is leading. Without great horror you can’t have great heroes. I disagree with LeiaMarie this story is awesome in spite of its gruesome nature.
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