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zondag 26 juni 2011 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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David
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Spelling Correction:
part 2
on me and I couldn't get lose
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Comment, Sounds like a shark to me. Smart and can be cold blooded at times.
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woensdag 2 februari 2011 from Renton, WA, USA
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Terry
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Hiya!

It's me again.

I remember this story and how disturbing it can be. I see you've given the character a little light at the end of the tunnel in this chapter though. Thanks for that. I'm looking forward to seeing her take advantage of that light.
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vrijdag 24 december 2010 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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so far so good
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woensdag 25 augustus 2010 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Adam
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Ah!
I didn't know. It looked like they didn't know what her powers were until after there 'kept' bio-elemental checked her. And by then, the implant was already in place. It was just at thought.
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woensdag 25 augustus 2010 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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EMW
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I'm sure they would have thought of that. We have organic circuitry now so by then with all the additions like carbon nanotubes it wouldn't be impossible for someone to make an implant without any metal in it. But whether they went to that amount of trouble for the others in the group is a good question.

Needles sure she could do things to them though there are already non needle based injection methods. With the bullets it's not clear to me whether the metal elemental powers would allow a sort of metal specific telekineses or just control of the shape of metals. Either way with concentration she could cause bullets to dissipate or deflect around her if they were metal.
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donderdag 19 augustus 2010 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Adam
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Metal elemental, huh? Are the probes in her head made of metal? [I haven't noticed fiber-optics being able to carry electrical current] Can she remove hers and the others with her ability? Needles and non-ceramic bullets should not reach her if she doesn't want them to, right?
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dinsdag 3 augustus 2010 from Renton, WA, USA
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Terry
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I'm not sure about this story. It almost seemed to be designed solely for shock value. Some of it was quite painful to read.

I'll keep reading though. I have to see how she [I won't use the name that was forced upon her] eventually gets free of these bastards. I'm assuming that she will get free, and I'm hoping that she'll retain her humanity after she does.

Thanks for the story.
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maandag 2 augustus 2010 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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kf
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Loved it. Cant wait for more
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