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vrijdag 16 september 2011 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Beyogi
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Great story... It started really dark, but it turned out all well... I really liked this one.

Thank you for writing,

Beyogi
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zaterdag 28 augustus 2010 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Chris
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I like your stories and in the stories that have an adult morph[not amorphs] there usually is some biocontaminant from someone in stage three.

A back story idea about morphs itself is that the original was a medical research and development and they also got research that was to help gender displaced people and military research into making better soldiers that the terrorist stole
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maandag 8 februari 2010 from Santa Monica, Your Nighted States
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Me, Myself, and I
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Having completed the story... Very well written and entertaining, but also intensely preachy, to the point of being 'Anvilicious' because of the way that several catch phrases are repeated numerous times to make sure that we the readers 'get it'. Very heavy-handed case of 'Author On Board'; the only TG story I've read that is more so is Prisoners of Tiresias by Christopher Leeson.

I've been reading the authors in alphabetical order, and have wondered at the dearth of changelings in a supposedly TG fiction story universe, and why many of the main characters seem determined to lay down and be extreme doormats when it comes to confronting the bullies and bigots. It would seem that Ray has raided the MORFS story warehouse and made off with most of the TG characters. It appears that he also ungenerously carted off all but about three or four cans of whoop-ass for the exclusive use of his characters. On the down side, though, giving them super powers allows them to slice through their challenges just a little bit too easily, bringing them perilously close to being Mary Sue characters [although Cara, the main character, does experiment and explore in order to maximize her gifts]. Still, an underpowered character who has to work hard and creatively to develop the full potential of her gifts makes for more interesting reading; see, for example, Joreymay's Angel's Tale, or the character 'Jade' in the Whateley Academy universe.
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maandag 8 februari 2010 from Santa Monica, Your Nighted States
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Me, Myself, and I
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I think that MORFing the guy who invented these things [high heels] into a female would be appropriate punishment.

Too late. Heels as we know them, worn strictly as a fashion statement, were first commissioned from a[n unknown] cobbler by a vertically challenged Catherine de Medici for her appearance at the royal court of France in 1533. Eventually, men were wearing them, too; in 1673, Louis XIV, the infamous 'Sun King' of France, decreed that red heels were to be restricted to those of the nobility who were welcome in his court, as an emblem of their power and 'elevated status'. High heels as fashion fell out of favor after the French Revolution, until women embraced them again toward the end of the 19th century.

Of course, there are enough women who wear them voluntarily.

Thank you for that.

One of the statistics most commonly quoted as an illustration of 'girl power' is that, in GB and the US, females account for 80% of all discretionary spending. The Marketing 2 Women consortium puts it at 85% over all, and over 90% in some categories, such as new homes. Fashion for women surely tops this list.

Women said that they wanted fashionable heels that are more comfortable to wear. Manufacturers have responded with round toes, square toes, almond toes, and long-points—all which provide more room in the toe box—in addition to the traditional pointy toes. They've developed ranges of low-heeled office-appropriate business pumps that include padding technologies adapted from athletic shoes.

If women en masse really rejected heels, they would quickly disappear from retail shelves, and become available only from specialty shops.

Everything that women hate, they blame on men. Repeating the propaganda does not make it more true, it just alienates more people.

Yes, I recognize that this is a humorous touch, and probably placed there, as such things often are in TG stories, to indicate how a character is adapting to her new gender by learning 'girl think'. Pitifully sad, though, that 'girl think' includes the blaming and, all too often, the bashing.
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woensdag 30 december 2009 from Portage, MI, USA
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Tom
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Wow, just wow. Very good story!
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donderdag 17 april 2008 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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sascha
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great story! go on!
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vrijdag 28 september 2007 from Edinburgh, Scotland (UK)
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Great Sage
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Thank goodness we finally have a religious group in a MORFS tale that aren't hate - filled nutters, this is good. This is a beautiful and engaging tale that made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside - this also is a good thing.
Every single one of the main characters ended up as a Kitty person or an Elf girl, they also ended up with almost identical suite of powers, this is boring - not a good thing. When Angel's Tale was written it was implied the Angel's trick was unique and strange - a fluke of someone utilising a low grade power in an unusual way, now we have an army of Bio-elementals, soon almost all Doctors will be bio-elemental/Telekinetic telepathic empaths - this is silly, on the plus side all those Purist scum bags will get screwed over by MORFS and turn into freaks - thus effectively wiping out the tedious bigots story lines in the future - Thank You Jesus [and the author]- maybe we will finally get more interesting and original bad guys.
You have been accused of FUBAR -ing the entire story line - not so sure about that , it looks more like MORFS is moving into a new stage where anyone can get the powers they want, transsexuals can finally become the gender their souls tell them they need to be for instance , comic book nerds can become costumed crime fighters and The Wrath of God can be unleashed upon all those that preach Hate [he he he].
We are surely moving into a Golden Age where ones appearance, gender and powers are merely a phone call away from changing on a whim - Oh what joy!

I also must point out that while you got carried away on this power trip the much more intersting feminisation of Cara got neglected somewhat, her daily life got glossed over too often - what about dates with Larry? did he ever take her to the movies, or a meal just the two of them? Did their kisses become more passionate? did they start to consider marriage or taking their relationship to the next level? how did she respond to her first time? How did she cope with PMS? how about learning how to deal with others as a girl? all that stuff is interesting to me and I suppose others, if I want action adventure I can pick up a comic book.

OK, I don't wish to come across like I hated the story because I didn't - I just found parts of it frustratingly short on details - I for one want to know how the heck Mrs Jones got MORFed into her daughter's older sister.

I am divided on the Amy rescue - on one hand having her be stoned to death was an incredibly gutsy move and provoked real pathos and depth in the protagonist, on the other hand it was just so wonderful for Cara to be reunited with her dearest friend again that I find it hard to remain disappointed at the sugar pill.

So what next? more of Cara etc? or perhaps Tina's tale, I want a Journey to Humanity 2 with more about Cara's relationship with Larry etc but I think you have said most of what is needed in this story.

lots of luck in your future writing.
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vrijdag 13 juli 2007 from Tustin, MI, USA
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Ray Drouillard
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The very first time Cara used that trick, she mentioned that she gently laid the attacker down. The Narrator didn't explicitly mention it in later cases, but it is pretty much SOP to not let the attacker fall and break something.

It was some Judo training that I took years ago that gave me the idea for that trick. I'm aware of the 'sleeper hold' that's used in some of the popular TV wrestling shows, but I know little about those shows.

I find it strange that my Judo instructors never told me about the dangers of those chokes. Of course, I've never seen one carried to completion. I always tapped out as soon as it was applied to me, and my opponents did likewise.

Thanks for the info. I'll have to do a bit of research on the subject and maybe apply it to my next story. Meanwhile, Tina has come up with an alternate method. [I'm not telling, though... hee hee]
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donderdag 21 juni 2007 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Puddintane
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Pinching the carotid artery to produce cerebral ischemia isn't terribly safe, as it's quite possible to cause a blood clot that travels straight to the brain, causing a dangerous [or fatal] stroke. It's also possible to kill the victim indirectly as well, since the resulting hypoxia may predispose the heart to an arrhythmia. In addition, a person being choked, even from within, is likely to struggle or panic until unconsciousness ensues, which results in release of catecholamines. These may also have an arrythmogenic action on the heart. The combined actions of direct hypoxia and indirect catecholamines may result in a fatal cardiac arrhythmia. Falling down unconscious isn't awfully safe either, which is why they advise people to lie down, or get as close to the floor as possible, if they feel faint. Someone ought to point this out sometime in the story, since 'sleeper holds' are well-known and perpetually popular among young men who dream of the mystical power to cloud men's minds.
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maandag 23 april 2007 from Bellevue, USA
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Terry
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I'm a little late posting a comment but better late than never, eh? [Sorry. That was bad. heh]


I enjoyed the story a lot. It covered some of the best and worst human behavior but the good won out. I crave happy endings.


I did think the powers were excessive but really it's okay because who's to say it wouldn't happen. If a person can have one power, why not two, three or more? It's good to explore all the different possibilities. Your story stands out at one end of the spectrum. That doesn't mean all subsequent stories by all the other authors have to do the same. I don't think it ruins the universe at all.


One thing I'd like to suggest here is to break up the story into sections and possibly even chapters. You can still submit it all at once but I beg for mercy. I have little willpower for stopping once I start. Chapters would make it easier to find a stopping point so I can sleep, eat and breathe once in awhile. Heh.

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