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vrijdag 8 februari 2013 from Wellington, Ks, USA
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tim
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Loved the story. Hope You finish it soon. You kinda left me hanging.
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woensdag 22 juni 2011 from oroville, usa
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jasonhawk
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love the story, please contenue it. i look forward to finsh reading it. thanks
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woensdag 9 december 2009 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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mad hobbit
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I enjoyed it very much,similar toa story idea I had, I play a MMO called City of heroes,and one of the allows you to summon a sword to fight with.and they havea duel blade power as well. look forward to more chapters
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dinsdag 25 november 2008 from [not submitted], Australia
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James
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You did make a few errors, but the story was excellant and I expect that when you write the next chapter, it will be even better.
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zondag 30 september 2007 from Edinburgh, Scotland (UK)
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Great Sage
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Interesting - the perspective shift halfway through was confusing and annoying but someone already addresed this very comprehensively, I also think Sam is being a total jerk, a whiny self pitying jackass, I mean some people became hybrids, she gets a fantastic, perfectly human body and a cool power...sheesh some folk are never happy - I hope she gets over herself soon, a little bit of freaking out is understandable but if this keeps up I will get tired of reading it.
There is a conspiracy - let there be no doubt because MORFS does not work like this and it is too much of a coincidence - I suspect terrorists, the thing is that there is no indication of what year this is set so if it is early on it could well be the terrorists or even the government playing silly beggars .
I think this has potential and as long as you learn to spell and/or get a proofreader then i plan on enjoying further instalments.
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woensdag 7 februari 2007 from Miltary, USN
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Akiko Mye Kato
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Great start on the story well me looking faward to the next chapters
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zondag 21 januari 2007 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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anonymous
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Apart from what others have said [which dooesn't need to be repeated] I really have to wonder why the camp wasn't closed down. I woulld at least have expected Sam to be sent home, even if she were the only morf. Not because she's a girl [good argument though] but because of the trauma. I certainly wouldn't imagine her father finding a loophole to make her stay...don't her parents care at all?

However with every camp in the area morfing I would expect the cdc to be down on that place like a ton of bricks, it's too big of a coincedence.

Even given all that I would imagine that there are girl camps arounds with gender change morfs. Why not exchange new girls for new boys?

I feel like this story is very much a first draft.
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zaterdag 20 januari 2007 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Shrike
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Nice start of a story, but if I may make a suggestion, do put a spelling checker over the writings. And though you don't have to say all the time who is saying what, make clear who it is that is saying something. I try to do it in my story. I can't say it is too short, as my parts are not that big also. It may get longer as I go on.
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zaterdag 20 januari 2007 from Phx, USA
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Jade
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Hey this was a wonderful new peace that was added everyone covered a few pointers on what needs to be done to improve on this story but it was still very well thought out and well written with those few exceptions. Please keep up the good work.
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vrijdag 19 januari 2007 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Ambi
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'gynocological' not 'genealogical'
Genealogy is the study of ancestors. You don't need stirrups for that.
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