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dinsdag 8 oktober 2013 from California City, U.S.A.
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Chris
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Just finished part two of 'An Anti Fairy Tale'. Sure does want more. Great writing but a shame to leave hanging.
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donderdag 28 mei 2009 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Riniko
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Interesting story, I really look forward to seeing the next chapter. Being in a coma for ten years, that would have very bad effects on a body after only a fraction of that time. But, I can credit that medicine may have advanced to keep that down, but I would have thought a telepath would have been contacted at least to try to retrieve her name at least if they were not able to awaken her. Again that could be countered by being resistant to telepathy. Final thought, I am guessing that this is a long term care facility and not a hospital.
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woensdag 29 april 2009 from Bellevue, WA, USA
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Terry
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I'm not sure what other recent comments are saying. Parts 1 and 2 look fine to me. Perhaps they've been fixed.

Ten years?! That's a long time. So has Adam grown taller since then? I'm guessing not.

What about Adam's mother? She was probably told that Adam died so she didn't look. This is so sad! I hope it gets better in the next chapter.
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donderdag 23 april 2009 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Jade
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I have to agree come on what were you thinking was this a flash back or something I mean come on.
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donderdag 23 april 2009 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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darkwinglance
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looks like part 2 needs to be removed its all from part one its a repost
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woensdag 22 april 2009 from [not submitted], [not submitted]
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Culex
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Part 2 is a repost of a section of Part 1.
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woensdag 22 april 2009 from Brisbane, Australia
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John
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A very good start to the story. The cliffhanger is a nasty one in all respects and I can't wait to see what happens next.
Only problems is that part 2 has already been posted at the end of part one.
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maandag 20 april 2009 from Muncie, United States
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David Fredrick Hyso
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Got to have more. can't just end it there. Please!
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woensdag 25 februari 2009 from Bellevue, WA, USA
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Terry
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This has promise. I wouldn't have ended the chapter where you did though. That's just too harsh after everything else that happened to Adam.

I would've ended it just after the first ramming. Give the kid a break. *sigh*

I love the new Adam by the way. It's a cute MORFS. I just hope everything turns out okay.

Thanks for the chapter though. Even though it's dark, I'm sure you must have more in store for Adam.
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donderdag 19 februari 2009 from Tustin, MI, USA
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Ray Drouillard
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Now, that's just mean!

You did a very good job of fleshing out the circumstances and the main characters. You succeeded in getting me to care about the main character.

Then you killed her. [pout]

I hope there is a part two, and that she is a bio elemental or shape shifter or regenerator or something like that. It'll take something potent to cure a crushed skull. [But hey, Wolf has gotten over worse.]
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